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A: 6- I provided an understanding of the text by including quotes when needed and analyzation of the specific language used within the passage itself. My understanding was not displayed in an "excellent," manor, therefore, not allowing me to move up on the rubric.
B: 6-My display of figurative language and other literary features was only "adequate." Only two overall categories were analyzed. Also, the reader was only considered in a few aspects and not referenced throughout the presentation.
C: 3-My organization was great until the end of my oral when I jumped back to the narration aspect of my argument. If I had included this earlier in the presentation I would have awarded myself with a higher mark.
D: 3- I used the word "um," as a filler more times than I would like to count (how annoying...). Also, I struggled at some points to form coherent sentences without hindering my overall message.
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ReplyDeleteGreat post! I thought your oral was very good. Your justifications are also very in depth and truthful. I also agree with the scores you gave yourself. I was very impressed with your organization, it was much better than mine! I think part of your success of organization stems from your great note-taking before hand. I love how you used different colors. This is something I did not do. I also thought, simply from briefly scanning your annotations, that you only marked things that helped further your argument. I know this is a difficult thing to do, but you did an excellent job annotating. Great work!!
ReplyDeleteI really loved your analysis in this practice IOC! I definitely see this passage as a moment of transition when the children and the audience realize that not everything is as it seems. I think you highlighted well the theme of innocence and its way of isolating the Hailsham clones as they do not quite understand their role in society. I think you had a great introduction with context to understand the passage and a good comparison between different parts of the book and passage. Your understanding of language and the text was evident! Great job Morgan!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I liked how you summarized the passage and gave us background before analyzing it. There was a lot of good analysis of this passage including noticing the pronouns and figurative language. i agree with all of the scores that you gave yourself. i could see that you had a deep understanding for this text
ReplyDeleteFirst off, from the picture you posted, I can really tell that you FIIDS and SPARSED the heck out of it! That was not something I did, which is why mine was reaalllly bad. They Marian, Molly, and Jose said previously, you summarized the passage well and pointed out the most important aspects of the theme and how Ishiguro presented his work. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis was great! I thought your organization flowed really well even with the slight mix up at the end. Your intro/thesis was strong and set you up well to answer the question. I did notice that you used "um" a few times but overall I think your analysis was very clear. Good job!
ReplyDeleteLike the others have said, fantastic job organizing your annotations. Next time, I think I'm definitely going to use multiple colors, because using just two turned out to really confuse me in my IOC. Your analysis of language was great. You looked at words that other people, including myself, don't usually look at: words such as you, they, and other more common words. Another aspect of your presentation that I thought was great was your organization, and that probably goes along with your excellent annotating. The ending may have been a little out of order, but in all, the organization was notable and deserves a good grade, I think. The only thing I would say is to make sure everything you analyze refers back to your thesis! I know I'm not very good at doing that myself (sometimes I forget what my thesis is), but that will make sure everything ties together! Awesome job Morgan!! :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Julia, and I can tell that you really FIIDS and SPARSED this passage. I also loved your use of different colors when annotating! I think that this way of preparing really helped the orgaanization of your IOC and, as Elizabeth said, your organization flowed really well. I also think that the grading you gave yourself was well justified, and I agree with your scores. Great job!!
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